Monday, 24 August 2020

Writing home learing

 One night the kid was camping in the woods, until then a monster appeared in the lake the monster was sneaking behind him but then the kid heard a scary sound behind himself he looked behind and he was shocked. He defended himself with a stick. The monster was looking at his marshmallow.

That boy pulled out the marshmallow out of the stick. The monster smiled at the kid and the monster poked his marshmallow and ate his marshmallow. The monster jumped happy. The boy gave him some more.
The monster ate two last marshmallows. The monster wanted some more. The monster smiled again. The boy walked backwards because they were finished. 
The monster was mad at him, he growled . He ran away he fall down he looked at the monster the monster run toward him the boy found a pillow that looks like a marshmallow he show it at the monster he throw the pillow and ran away the monster run to get the pillow he think it a marshmallow he used the stick he poke it he it close to the fire it burned the monster was sad.
The End

2 comments:

  1. Wow Fritz I am so impressed that you have added this on your own blog. What a star home learner you are.
    You have made a great attempt at retelling with descriptions and in order. Make sure you read your own writing carefully so that you know it will make sense for someone else reading it.
    I can't wait to see what you share on your own blog next. Mahi pai!

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    1. Hi kylie,thank you for your nice comment.

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